Love your writing style, the words are so well set -- where to begin? I'll just settle on the last part -- "hellfire and glory await us." It just says so much about their hopes and wearied thoughts.

~PT

I really think you've got to pop a few more periods in this because without one it's just one long sentence broken up by a multitude of commas and semi colons. One other little suggestion, I don't think you need to capitalise the first word of each line in this. It's an old tradition in poetry, sure, but I don't think it's helping you out here.

Otherwise, you've got some great imagery. I love "fingers like sizzling spiders", it's got this great aural quality to it.

.:midnight:.