Reviews for Rewind, Slow Motion

Reviews For: Rewind, Slow Motion

simpleplan13 2008-01-31 ch 1,	abuseI really liked what this piece was about... maybe because I like Diane Sawyer, but mostly because of the way you intertwined current events and history... Im not 100% sure if its supposed to be a Napoleon reenactment or actual Napoleon, but either way with the Josephine rewinding it comment you tied the two together, which I found very powerful The word choice was also wonderful.. especially the alliteration in the beginning stanza... and the world beatific was an amazing choice (that I admit I had to look up..lol).. the specific exaggeration about the miles per minute (at least I think its an exaggeration) was also great There wasn't a lot of of beautiful imagery, but the whole piece definitely gave me a visual image of this telecast... and I loved the description "hair peppered with inane questions" I'm not a big fan of the way it flowed... at certain spots it seemed really odd that it was a new line.. it happens a lot (last two lines of the second stanza, the last two lines in the second stanza, the 4th and 5th and last three lines in the third stanza, so I'm thinking maybe you did it intentionally, but I didn't particularly care for it... All in all I really enjoyed the piece... it caught my attention and kept it with the interesting topic and the wording itself...
my poetic lie sense 2007-09-18 ch 1,	abusei like this poem, it is intruiguing. i have no idea who diane sawyer is, i'm guessing she is a celebrity of some sort. umm, i think the use of diane sawyer was cool in the first stanza, but you didnt follow through with that through the other stanzas. it seemed like you added it in there out of nowhere. i like the short, blunt phrases. very effective. 'waterloo, spreads flecks of tomorrow' sounds pretty awesome too. alliteration and structure are good too. overall, good job!
greenGalilee 2007-02-20 ch 1,	abuseI like the word choice and the overall idea of the poem. Very clever, sending Diane Sawyer a few centuries back. (You mean the journalist, right? I might be completely wrong, and if I am, please don't laugh.)Or maybe Napoleon is sent a few centuries forward... I can't decide. I think I understand some of the meaning, but I'm also quite sure that I've missed most of it... In any case, I don't have anything big to say in the shape of criticism, though I think that maybe having the stanzas somehow flow/connect more fluidly instead of starting them on a sudden note might make it a bit easier to understand... But I personally like it this way. Great work!
Michael l'oeil fol 2007-02-16 ch 1,	abuseyou have an odd style, yet it is intriguing and it does capture attention...good stuff MLF
The Un-great-ful 2007-02-09 ch 1,	abuseI think there is a lot here I don't get, but I get the feeling that if I did get it all, it'd make a whole lot of lovely sense. Who is Diane Sawyer? I don't know her. Maybe it matters not, maybe she's not real, but if that were the case then I suppose no clear sense could be made of the poem, so she must be real. Any way. Sorry my review is poo, but it just is. I'm sure it makes lots more sense to people with better general knowledge than me. Keep writing, Alan.
Femme de Dieu 2007-02-08 ch 1,	abuseHm. First off, I really did like the first two lines, and the use of beatific. I've been wanting to use that word for a while, but haven't come up with precisely the right idea in which to incorporate it. So kudos on that. I also enjoyed the "commentary" of Napoleon and Waterloo and Josephine, and how it relates to our day and age and what the world is being put through at "thirteen thousand miles per minute." I get the connection between using Diane Sawyer, a newscaster, to the rest of the piece, but I think I would have liked to have had her, and her teeth (ha!), drawn back in as a last stanza, just to round things out. Somehow, it felt like a loose end. If you did that, you'd have "Diane Sawyer" and her "beatific smile"; then the "rewind/slow motion" verse; followed by the perfect middle stanza; then "rewind, slow motion" again; followed by another "Diane Sawyer" (and maybe not use "beatific smiles" twice, but rather a look of bitterness or regret the second time?). Just my humble thoughts. I bow to your skill, however. Truly, Tourterelle

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