This was a beautifully written story... and it's sci-fi too.^_^
You explained everything alright, but there's not much background to go on.
Everything was a good idea though.^_^
Good job!!

Oh. My. God! This brought me to tears! Tears! How did you do that in about 3500 words?! I don't understand how you got me so attached to Allen's existence so quickly! Can you go and get this published? Seriously?! I don't even know what else to say. GEEZ! I am floored by your writing. The details! The raw, perfect details! Alright, I'm done. I loved it. 'Nuff said.

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