Wonderful imagery, wonderful piece.

That was yet another brilliant poem. I love your descriptions. On to the next one...

very nicely done. i enjoyed it :) write on! magnus

I love this poem from the title through the final word. "Let's pretend" is an excellent opener and continuation that is used just perfectly to adjust the following words to a dazzled sense of weightlessness. "Grand clocks winding down the solstice stair" is a gorgeous image and "blank roar rushing stones" is has an incredible sound. This is simply bursting with compelling imagery and movement.

Oh, that is beautiful. Just gorgeous. I love all these images of "not existing" that you've created - they're so peaceful and natural and I can say I completely feel this way so much of the time lately. The last image, with the flashlight shining between ribs, casting that shadow on the wall...That is just fantastically worded and the visual is so crisp! Because I am completely feeling this piece, it's going on my favorites. Gorgeous. Keep writing! :)

A very aptly named poem. The wording is almost fragile, which creates a very "weightless" feeling. All in all, a very evocative and eloquent piece. Well done.

"grand clocks winding-down the solstice stair", is eloquent phrasework. I like the concept of this. The way that it develops as a mind-picture works well because the voice creates a world that the reader can now view that would have been previously unavailable. Your use of sound is excellent. This rolls and echoes well in the reading. Good work. MD:77.