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| SheridanSpence 2008-04-14 ch 1,  | abuseWonderful imagery, wonderful piece. |
| Infinite Smiles 2007-02-17 ch 1, | abuseThat was yet another brilliant poem. I love your descriptions. On to the next one... |
| magnusthewolf 2007-02-13 ch 1, | abusevery nicely done. i enjoyed it :) write on! magnus |
| Osunale 2007-02-10 ch 1, | abuseI love this poem from the title through the final word. "Let's pretend" is an excellent opener and continuation that is used just perfectly to adjust the following words to a dazzled sense of weightlessness. "Grand clocks winding down the solstice stair" is a gorgeous image and "blank roar rushing stones" is has an incredible sound. This is simply bursting with compelling imagery and movement. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-02-10 ch 1, | abuseOh, that is beautiful. Just gorgeous. I love all these images of "not existing" that you've created - they're so peaceful and natural and I can say I completely feel this way so much of the time lately. The last image, with the flashlight shining between ribs, casting that shadow on the wall...That is just fantastically worded and the visual is so crisp! Because I am completely feeling this piece, it's going on my favorites. Gorgeous. Keep writing! :) |
| Anaare 2007-02-10 ch 1, | abuseA very aptly named poem. The wording is almost fragile, which creates a very "weightless" feeling. All in all, a very evocative and eloquent piece. Well done. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-02-09 ch 1, | abuse"grand clocks winding-down the solstice stair", is eloquent phrasework. I like the concept of this. The way that it develops as a mind-picture works well because the voice creates a world that the reader can now view that would have been previously unavailable. Your use of sound is excellent. This rolls and echoes well in the reading. Good work. MD:77. |