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| EmeraldsAndPearls33 2007-02-18 ch 1,  | abuseThis was a moving, deeply metaphorical piece of literature. The tone was consistent and your choice of words fit effortlessly. Also, the rhymes flowed and didn't seem forced. 5 out of 5 stars. Emily ; ) |
| BlueJayWalking 2007-02-09 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is simply amazing. I especially like the first stanza. The whole poem is so melancholic..and yet has this lovely quaintness about it. Love these lines: "Even if I have to crawl, and still I Would search the twinkling, star strewn sky, And sap the sun; deaden its dazzling day, Making the heavens as desolately grey As you have left me." And I marvel at your ability to rhyme! It looks so effortless! Completely lacks the tackiness some poems have when the authors can't think of any other word to stick onto the ends of each line. You've left me wishing I wrote this - heck, something half as good as this. :P It's on my faves. Wonderful work. |
| Sophia Victoria 2007-02-08 ch 1, | abuseWow. Simply Shakespearean. . . |