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| scribblemuse 2008-05-29 ch 1,  | abusePowerful stuff, dude. But even the darkest dreams are laced with light. I need a little more of that in this piece to keep the darkness of the narrative from obscuring all meaning. Keep on writin', scribbs |
| Lurid Black 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseDescriptive and dark... I like the way you've explained more than just what you can see. ~Lurid~ |
| Adenil 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseOh snap, this is awesome. Really, very lovly. You have a few tiny spelling errors (join the club) but other than that I can find no faults with this at all. Thank you for this, even if it was a bit depressing! |
| lovelycrimson27 2008-03-06 ch 1, | abusei like it all but the fact that its very repetative...i think prolly b/c theres no distinction between different lines. other than that i love it : ) |
| Kari Kaiba-Wheeler 2007-08-23 ch 1, | abuseWow... |
| Daphne D'Apple 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseI love the descriptions and the feeling that the poem radiates here! Daphne D'Apple |
| MasquradingManiquins 2007-07-25 ch 1, | abusehey i like this one think you other use some of the phrases to be totally honest with you but its still good reminds me of saying i heard "you walk towards the light in your tunel just a freight train coming your way" its really good dude |
| Saint Rogue 2007-05-15 ch 1, | abuseWow so dark indeed.. So depressed.. But very well written. |
| akikodomo 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abuselol I love this poem. I am curently in that stage in life and it in a way is hard but also very comforting. Good writing. |
| trrstrgtdxghtre 2007-04-02 ch 1, | abuseWonderful! I LOVE it! I completely understand how you feel! |
| Sady-Lyn 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseThis makes me sad. Are you sure you're not depressed? You sound like it. Well, I'm going to go review your other stuff, because I said I would and I have access to a computer right now (we're not doing our work and the teacher doesn't really care, so I'm going on here to read your stuff). But I'm getting random so I'm going to go and do something else. Ooh, look, a shiny object! Sorry, what was I saying again? Darn it. I'll figure it out sooner or later. I hope. |