This is awesome. Best thing I've read on here in a long time, although the alliteration in the first stanza is a bit much for that section. Really good - please keep it up (for sanity's sake)!

I'm stunned.

Tis an interesting poem. Tis an even more interesting insight into your life. I like the descriptions of phrases.

Good strong use of imagery makes this a delight and am interest to read. The language is rich yet easy to understand. Narration played the scene out gracefully without any unnecessary hesitation or pause while also revealing so much in terms of the relationship between the two people. Well done.

nice use of allusions... use of words is great too... simple, sweet, delicate & true... great upload!^^

Wow love the wording. I really enjoyed reading it!