Reviews for Following the Fox

Reviews For: Following the Fox

iamzpyro 2008-03-29 ch 15, anon.	abuseDark humor, very nice. "Yellow tomatoes," so random, yet so awesome. "She rolled her eyes and went back to playing checkers with Andrew." I thought they were playing chess. I like the vision of hell, not just fire and brimstone, but pointy water too. The characters need a little more emotional depth, although your descriptions are great, painting a picture of the characters without getting repetitive. The plot is a fresh take on the "demon" thing, combined with a dash of high school commentary. It's all well and good, but you should work a little on transitions, they are a little jarring.
FM Radio 2008-01-08 ch 15,	abuseupdate this. End of discussion.
TheCrystalMaiden 2007-04-20 ch 1,	abuseLol, humorous so far, in a kinda dark way. :P Keep up the good work!
TaigaSama 2007-03-26 ch 8,	abuseIt's good. I'd definitely agree with some of the others. There are a few places where it definitely could use some more vivid imagery. Personally the plot seems a little (for lack of a better word)trite but even so it presents it well. Keep it up.
rikufanattic 2007-02-24 ch 5,	abuseI love this story so far, besides I like kitsune. It's original so I give it props. I'll be looking forward to this story. Heh, I have a thing for kitsune's maybe that's why I wrote one about a kitsune too... Oh well who the heck knows what goes on in my head! But, yeah it is interesting, but don't forget to add depth into the characters just a bit more, that's all I can say. Keep writing and I'll keep reviewing.
dark-skies 2007-02-24 ch 1,	abuseThe story is very unique and I like it a lot :) My only advice, to add just a little more...imagery? To make it a little more vivid and detailic.
Leinnansidhe 2007-02-14 ch 3,	abuseDude... you used 'un-froufroued'. You officially are my favourite person EVER! And I love the story thus far. The dialogue sounds so real, it's fantastic. This descriptions are also great, I get a good mental picture, but with enough room for the image to be added to with my own imagination; it's definitely novel material. I'd buy it in a heartbeat
Akimoto Sakura 2007-02-10 ch 2,	abusehmm...nice...i like the direction you're bringing your story to... keep writing! are you gonna give the characters more personality, makes it easier to recognise them.
TwilightReverie 2007-02-10 ch 2,	abuseAhh, i see where your going with this...maybe...probably not, BUT STILL, i like. blushes I really dont make making suggestions as i have been because its not my work but yours, but is there any reason why you dont refer to "satan" as Lucifer? I personally like that name alot more and it kinda makes it sound a little betta than chattin wit the devil. Trenchcoat significance ey? sounds good then, yeah, it does seem to suit her betta than most of the other's who use to (gunslinging guys who are constantly chased by people wanting to kill them). KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK ^_^
TwilightReverie 2007-02-09 ch 1,	abusecrits ey? how harshly do u desire? U ALMOST lost me at the mention of a trench coat (as like many, ive been down that way with character attire and it just annoys me now because SO many people use it) yet, u regained me with the bowler hat, as they are awesome ^_^ I like the idea u set out in your summery quite abit, 1 tail for each level or whatever, though the whole "queen of hell" title and the steriotypical devil image didnt really sit well with me. The teenager, making friends and partying thing is always good, especially when your reader is in that age group...and...yeah, all up i rather liked it and ill probably start reading the next chapter now. Sorry if this review was a little too critical.
River Rains 2007-02-09 ch 1,	abusecan't wait to read more. sorry but i'm not very good at the editing thing.
Akimoto Sakura 2007-02-09 ch 1,	abusevery interesting and original story line. more details can perhaps be added and more descriptions too. if possible, plan the story plot first. try not to get to the point so fast as it would be kindda boring that way. can work on charater's personallity and character development. go for it!!

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