Reviews for May I Please Have My Heart Back?

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Tetelestai 2008-07-07 ch 1,	abuseThis was really good! The entire time I was nodding to myself, since I've done the exact same thing throught junior high/senior high hahaha. Depressing one-shot, but true for a lot of people. Good job!
x3life 2008-06-24 ch 1,	abusethis was really good!! but depressing =(
Girl 2008-06-24 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow. For your first time writing a one-shot, this is really good. I liked it a lot, although I thought the ending was a bit cut off. Adding another paragraph wouldn't hurt but that's just my opinion. Overall, very good job. Can't wait to read more. :)
emotionless-stares 2008-06-24 ch 1,	abuseThis was sad but yea it was really good especially since it's your first time. I can empathize. I hope you write more.
Hot Pink Platypus 2008-06-23 ch 1,	abuseThat... was... too... amazing. I absolutely loved this oneshot! So sweet, yet so sad. I have to say, if this is your first fic, well, you better start writing more, cause I'll have to stalk your stories. (when you do write them, of course! ~wink wink~) It made me remind myself that I also did have that special person in my heart, (cheesy, isn't that), but I could never reach him in reality. Eh, it's true. So, bravo on this story, and I'll be waiting for more!! ~The Platypus :D
x.betweenthelines 2008-06-22 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is amazing. Her emotions were beautifully described. Love it! Good job for your first story.
Lily Llynn 2008-06-22 ch 1,	abuseOh, this is depressing. But it's well-written and the emotions are easily felt by the reader. We feel her pain and her heartbreak, and we sympathize with her. I also like this because it's not traditional fluff - we don't always have happy endings. I think this is awesome, and I'm going to now add it to my c2. (:
J. Kirova 2008-05-29 ch 1,	abuseSo. fkn. true. Kudos and great job.
CK Shorty 2007-07-18 ch 2,	abuseHm...another chapter, I have no idea. I think that as a one-shot, it was really good, and even though it ended a bit quickly, everyone got the hint as to how things would turn out. Then again, I CAN see this as a story. :) SO, your choice, I guess? I really think it should stay a one-shot if you're not up to keeping up a story.
CK Shorty 2007-07-18 ch 1,	abuseWOW, that was terribly sad, but very good. The emotions came through very strongly. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to what you have written, even myself. I'm actually in the same situation right now, ha, but I'm actually close friends with him...but I 'observe him from afar'. :) Wonderfully done. The part that really got me was when she was the only one to wish him Happy Birthday, and he didn't even know who she was :( That would really crush me. You'd think he'd at least remember her just a bit. Loved it!
decadebydecade 2007-05-06 ch 2,	abuseThat was sad. And cute. I liked the way you phrased her feelings. I definitely think you should continue this story. But only f you have a plot worked out--and don't worry about the length of the story. You shouldn't try to make it long, because then it sounds really forced. Instead just write the chapters according to the plot, and if it's short, it's short. No big deal. At least, it's not forced or abandoned, you know? It might just kind of write itself and end up being one of your longest pieces. You never know. Give it a shot if you can work something out. Good luck :)
AbbeyEileen 2007-04-19 ch 2,	abuseShort stories are always great, but make them in separate stories and not all one story-- unless they all revolve around one set of characters, and it's a collection of one-shots about them...
caralene 2007-04-12 ch 1,	abuseThat was sad. I think you just wrote what most girls feel at seventeen(that includes me). Great job.!
darlingnicotine 2007-04-03 ch 1,	abuseUm, wow! I love this so much, it leaves me waiting for so much more...Like maybe you should start a story! Or not, whatver floats your boat. I think this is really good, you should really write more you know. It's so good...I can totally see this happening...ah heartache. Well, darling you did very well...and why did i just call you darling? well you deserve it..so its all good!
Shina Laris 2007-02-14 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is very poignant and wonderful. I'm glad to have read it. =)

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