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| MyNameIsMad 2007-02-10 ch 1,  | abuseKwah! I really like this! You have a wonderful grasp of exposition, though your dialogue sounds a bit unnatural at times. You know what they say, "the shorter the sentence, the more that's said." Well...maybe that's what I always say. Anyways, good job here! I didn't see any glaring grammar mistakes, which is a godsend here on fictionpress. Too often people bang something out and then post it without bothering to read through it a second time (I myself am guilty of this folly). Keep up the good work! This is going on my favorites! -Mad |