dammit. i don't even know what to say. this was just perfection. i havent read anything like this in the longest time and it was so freaking refreshing. i adore this poem. honestly.

every line, everything. i cant even pick out a part i loved most cos i love it all. it's so perfectpoetic and it says so much. i adore.

Your work never ceases to amaze me. Word choice, concepts, everything. You've got talent! :)

Very good; just needs capital letters at the start of your sentences (or even the lines, as this appears to be an artistic poem). The "s-cr(y)-eaming" was clever.