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Casey Drake 2007-02-10 . chapter 1
Interesting... and I like how you brought Icarus into it...

:) CD
The Un-great-ful 2007-02-10 . chapter 1
Some parts of this were good, you have a typo in the line "I could emerge from the shadows". I found the reference to Icarus (was it Icarus?) at the end a bit odd, truly I thought it strained the piece.

Like I say, there was good content in here.

Keep writing,

Alan.
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