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| They call me Tamara 2007-06-08 ch 1,  | abuseThis is quite good, I enjoyed the way you turned it around in such a short time so that the writer was calm then sad. I'm not sure about the last line, I think it sounds fairly casual and doesn't really fit with the tone of the poem, but apart from that well done, an overall good effort. Keep writing! Tamara |