wow, extremely touching.

Wow this chapter is even beter than the first. I love the irony in it. This is like 'Ode to lost friendship and Life' Anyways it was great!

Surreal

Wow those 3 words can kill you. Get Over it. Cold heartless and used so often I sometimes wonder if they have any meaning, I really liked this. You have a different styler of writing that really speaks volumes. I can't wait to read the second chapter and review it.

Thanks for reviewing my work, and if you really do want to add it to your C2 go ahead, I'm honored.

Keep it up,
Surreal

I've read the first and a bit of the 2nd chapter... and what I must say is you've got a voice in your writing. I don't want to be generic or anything but voice is the one thing that bonds a piece of writing together. You could have grammatical mistakes, phrase a couple things akwardly, or detail in a could unnesscary bits. ex:

and I'd told him I'd tell his girlfriend, poor girl with the hippie name and no dress sense,

((the part below))
> the girl who wanted to be me when she grew up, “stop going on about that, it was ages ago. Get over it.”

But for a non-final revise; that's so okay as we know. The main thing is the voice. anyone with a voice they know how to use can stir up some great potiental. and yours so distinictive & fresh. So keep goin' with the flow and writing!

~Wishdream

i also share this problem-"get over it"-very good title huni,hugs xx

This is great, really powerful. You've expressed everything so well. I've never been a victim of rape, but I've had my own share of problems. God it ** me off when people just tell me to 'get over it'. Usually the ones who say that are the people who's greatest trial has been an argument with a friend, or a low science grade. What would they know? Ok, sorry about ranting in your review page. Thanks for sharing this.

You're right, being a rape victim isn't easy... and I admire you for being able to talk and write about it when I'm to weak to strait out admit it.

ANYWAYS, I really enjoyed this rant... I mean, honestly, people should stick to giving Them Selves advice.

My favorite line was: "You see, it's a private joke – I'll be fine, when I know that I'll never be fine again. Or perhaps I was never fine in the first place."

I have to admit it made me smile. I love it when somebody plays on the private jokes that nobody will understand.

*Adds to Favs and C2*

this was really good. very powerful.

love ya.