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| AmberMarieee 2007-02-18 ch 1,  | abuseaw thats really sad. well-written though, good job. |
| The Postscript 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abuseGood thoughts, but it's missing this element of poetry. Take what you have and transform it in a new light. Tell a story, use descriptive imagery. Make these words come alive, just like these feelings have come alive in you somehow. Even so, you express beautiful sentiment. "A person who gave me hope/You were always there for me" -- we should all have someone like this in our lives. Wonderful job. Keep writing, k. |