I like the summary you wrote for this one, its very original! This was not what I was expecting from what I thought was a romance novel, it's so good! I didn't expect it to happen and even in such a short chapter you managed to convey the pain and anger and a confusion of emotion in a time of death. I think the way you treated this issue was really different and shows your skill as a writer to take a convention and turn it on its head. This piece sounds a lot like a letter as it was mostly addressed to another character, you could experiment writing it as more of a story as there are some really powerful moments in this piece. Well done!

Shit! is this real? wait, no, i shouldn't ask something like that--i'll write it as commentary instead: shit, this felt real as hell, so much that it scares me. god, what a beautiful piece of work this is. -hugs you!!-

...Wow, I seriously hope this wasn't autobiographical... And if so, you've my deepest sympathies.