This is an amazing, delicately twisted, double helix of a plot. It reminds me of Jodi Picoult. Wonderful. Seriously, good luck in future endeavors (especially the possible re-write of this particular story.

I like the way you've written the story so we get background on all characters in a way. Do keep writing it. Hopefully you'll have time to work on it again soon! good luck :]

I'd beta you...but i don't think I'd be very good.

hey, c'mon...ya proised.

Hey, it's me, Finally read these two chapters in broad daylight. Nice, easy, smooth proze, making a sharp contrast with the events. Please weite more of this. Is it true that Texas isa black hole? Friend of mine told me so.

This is so beautifully written. It seems so real the way you've worded it and it flows quite well.
You have a loyal fan~

You have created a very realistic feel in these two chapters. Making the characters real and there emotions palpatable. I see lots of tears coming.

This is an AWESOME start!

Oh man. Wow. Color me impressed. This is one of the best things that I've read in a while!

excellent. i'm wondering at the ending though...they went from distant yet friendly, to suddenly growled threats and lustiness. i may have missed a transition there, but it just surprised me. seemed like it came out of nowhere. i guess we're going to need some more background, eh? in any case, it's an awesome first chapter and i'm looking forward to the next one.