 gigglebug 2008-09-10 . chapter 1You have an awesome imagination. Just thought I'd point that out. :D
Having said that, this is pretty interesting. Though, when you said you were fleeing the country, you didn't say which way (out over California / over the East coast). You mention later that you're in the eastern hemisphere, but wouldn't it make more sense if you said that earlier? Judgment call...
But otherwise, all points look good. :) |