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| Ophelia's Crown 2007-02-14 ch 1,  | abuseReverting back to your roots, it seems with the consistent beach-sea references. I like how you continued the imagery from "of innertubes" The death of the reality of days past is very vivid, but even in the passing, there is fondness and remembrance (hence, in memoriam.) What's dying in the underlying tones here? I hope it's not your muse of a sense of a home. Happy Valentine's Day. |
| Asher Rodriguez 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abuseNot bad, pretty deep. But you could defintely break up some of those sentences. |