Please write more this is a great story!

The chapter is pretty interesting, but I think the focus probably would have worked better for the plot if it had been shifted to the luncheon with Ankhesenamun than the game they were playing. At the moment it feels a bit ominous with the worm infestation, but Ankhesenamun's illness isn't adding to it as much as it could.

I'm back! And you're back! I'm glad.

I've forgotten how old they are. Khamun's probably 15-ish, right? Is he King Tut? For some reason I think he is. I've forgotten a lot about this story. But I'm really liking the mentioning of second-wives. Whatever that is. I just know that entails romance between Khamun and her. Excitement. At least he's thinking about it. Yes. Good stuff. Awaiting the next chapter.

Olivine.

I love how original this story is. Your descriptions are great, and I'm looking forward to reading more of it. Is Nabirye's mistress going to completely explode again? Ha, I know I'll have to wait, but I'm really enjoying this.

I like it! There are some things that really don't fit in with the Egyptian culture, but otherwise it's really good! One example, I'm sure that they don't know who indians are, and it's probably not a good idea to say that he sat indian-style. Plus, back in Egypt cat's were treated like Gods.

I thought it was a little wierd that she accepted the fact that he was the phaoroh so quickly. I didn't think that was too realistic...

--Greyhound.

that was a good chapter! i cant wait till they meet again, see how things will turn out
Strong.living

It was obvious she was going to find out about Khamun being the pharoah this chapter, at the end. I wonder, though, if she'll still take her walks to the Nile and if she does, will he? And if he does, what's going to happen? Hmm. Well, we'll see next chapter, so you'll have to update.

--Greyhound.

i likes this chpater it was way good hon
strong.living

Okay, I was slightly confused for a few minutes, there. Then I went back, and figured it out, but I'm going to tell you, just in case I'm wrong. I thought Lady Zalika was Pharoah, and Anpu was her son, the prince. But she's just one of the "VIPs" in the palace, isn't she? And then Khamun (thank god you gave him a nickname, his whole name would be impossible for us reviewers to spell) is the pharoah. That seems right. Though I'm not sure about their age. I remember learning somewhere that King Tut died really young. 18, maybe? So he must be about 15 or 16 in this story, am I right? And then Nabirye a few years younger? If I had an idea of their ages, it would be much easier for me to picture them in my mind as I read, and to understand the characters.

And anyways, now the story's picking up some speed, just like you promised me. And when I saw Khamun's name, I'm like "So that's what she let out of the bag!" Ha, you're doing great so far. Except I've got to wait until Thursday to see the next chapter. Oh, well. Everything will be okay, and the world won't end until then. Well, I'm not so sure about the global warming situation, but I think we will be alright until Thursday. Haha. I'm so funny.

Awaiting the next chapter --Ss.

Ok mad at you now

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ah very interesting i like it. its very interesting. Stronng.living

Well, would you look at that? I was going to go to your other account and read this, anyways, but I guess it makes it all the better now that it's here, and I got the alert since you're on my alerts. Makes things easier. Except, I'm not so sure of what to say about it. It seems really realistic, and this is probably a prologue. But it at the same time seems a little mechanical, monotonous. Hm. We'll have to see. It is interesting, of course, to see this style from you. Not that it's really amazing. It's just different to me, since I've been so used to Belleview Chronicles. Anyways, according to my very complicated calculations, you're going to update tomorrow, so until then.

--Ss.