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| Sakka-Fenikkusu 2007-02-13 ch 1,  | abuseThis poem is very vague. It doesn't make a lot of sense, and sounds like rambling. I don't know what it's about, and you didn't even put it through a spelling or grammar check, which makes me think that you didn't put a lot of effort into it. All in all, it needs a lot of work. I'd edit this, try to make it more specific, and play around with the format a bit. Even if you don't heed my suggestions, thank you for your time. Sakka-Fenikkusu |