If you ever do want to write a book you have to give more detailed capture your readers attention by using a creative string of words. This is not going to cut it.

Hey,

This is an amazing story.

You have good writing genes...

erm, twilight much? but good story

aw

great story

Erin it's me sarah, and I love your story! it made me smile :) I love cute romances. And I also can hear your voice too, when I read it, which is awesome. It is deffinately original, not like anything I have read before, and I love the names of your characters. I have a question though, in the hospital Alexa said that she still loved Victor. Were they in love before? And the only suggestion that I have would be to expand on Alexa and Victor's relationship. People don't fall in love in a day. So that's all I have to say. Love you dear!

Sarah

This was an excellent story! Do you plan to write a sequeo to it by any chance?

it PAYS to actually read the rest of the story, doesn't it? now i have a much better understanding about...well, why he was crying. because honestly, i thought that was a bit much when he did cry when giving her the present, but now i have a pretty good view of it. it makes sense! off to read the rest.

I really like the story's concept, and the characters are likeable. It is a bit fast paced, but then again it doesn't drag on too much, so I don't really lose interest as I read on. My only critique that I can't help but mention, is probably...I don't really understand the character's thought processes...or why does Victor love Alexa so much, after a simple outing and a few swapping of words. It will probably be revealed/explained in future chapters, so I'll just shut up about it until i finish the entire thing.

Well done for finishing this! Sometimes it is better to leave a piece for a while before commiting to the last bit to clear the head a bit.

Nice twist with Sam, I didn't see that coming. The last sentence was sweet. Glad I was finally able to read how Alexa's adventure turned out.

wonderfully schnazzy!

might I suggest fleshing it out a bit when you have time?

just a thought.

however, I really liked it!

C.

A very good ending to an awesome story

that was a pretty good story, with a wicked sick ending :) !

She should have had Victor bite her; that would have been sexy. (Sorry if that last comment disturbed you)

i loved the line

"I will be with you until the very end, then I will take my own life and we will begin our new life in death."

and

"Yep, we're going to put it to a vote. We are voting on my humanity."