Lovely. I'm really liking the direction this story seems to be going in. And the characters seem to be developing even more. Keep up the amazing work, and update soon!

~Carm~

Absolutely brilliant, really enjoyed reading this! Story is really taking shape

Hope your having a great summer, only one thing to ask where has the Dragon story gone? can't remember the name of it...

You deserve a mountain of chocolatey chocolate chip cookies for this chapter. It was so well written, very well done. Fantastic :) Great job, and I can't wait for more!

~carm~

Excellent chapter. I love the way you make the characters interact with each other. It's believable, and not to mention, entertaining. Good job on this, and I can't wait to read more!

~carm~

This is a truly wonderful story. Your descriptions are fantastic, and let the reader see into the world you've created. I like the way you use dialogue; it's realistic and flows naturally. And the storyline is addictive! Good job on this, and I can't wait for more.

~carm~

Chapter 2 flows really well after Chapter 1, I'm really enjoying this story - roll on the other chapters!