AMAZING. I like how you potrait the heroes as stupid knuckleheads, because they are.

Its a good start. I can see a good story rising from this excerpt. Where is the rest?

This is amazing!

Just as promised, refreshingly different from the norm. And yet still good, and allows sympathizing...or empathising..or...whateverizing...with the protagonist. Continue?

Very good. I lIked it a lot I treminds me of the evil overlord list...:3

if you -do- get it published, you -will- tell us, right? So I can run out and grab a copy?

Aw, darn. I was partially through reading it awhile ago... well, at least I know how it ends. I'll be reading the sequel next.

Any success in getting it published yet?

-SapphireIris

From what I've read this seems like a highly entertaining story. I too am a huge fan of the Evil Overlord list :) Unfortunately as this is the only chapter I've read I'm understandably very confused. I absolutely understand the need to take the story off this site when trying to publish, but perhaps you could have left up only the first chapter. That way readers like me who didn't discover this gem until now aren't hopelessly lost and ruining the ending for whenever they might get to read the rest, and will be incurably hooked by getting to read only the beginning and thus be quite happy to grab at the chance to read the rest once it is in print.
In any case, Just from this chapter the story seems fun. I can't say much more about it without having read at least a little more. I enjoyed reading what you have left up, and wish I could read the rest. Good luck with your publishing endeavors!

Exactly like the How to be an Evil Overlord guidelines. Nice way to end it as well.

Wish I could say more, but I doubt I need to.

Well done.

-Nimit

Argh. I hadn't finished it. Post if it gets published.

Well... I wish you luck with getting the thing published, it would be really great ^_^ you could start a forum on this account for updates concerning how its coming. Like I said before, good luck!

Alas, I was busy studying for midterms and missed the second to last chapter. -sigh- But I can understand your reasoning. And thank you for keeping the last chapter posted- it would have driven me nuts otherwise!

Best of luck with publishing; it's a tough business, but I think that you two have real talent. Even if this particular story doesn't get published- though I think it is more than worthy- then I'm sure you will get something else published in the future. And, rest assured, if I ever see your book in stores, it'll be an instant addition to my collection. :)

Thanks for sharing your work with us; it was original and a real pleasure to read. Thank you!

yeah i know stupid name


congradulations about your publication, could you pleease tell us your real names in order to lighten the search

I have been so impressed with this story. I have laughed and cried...mostly laughed, ha ha! I am glad you are looking to get it published, I was thinking the other day that I wish I had a hard copy to add to my collection. Good Luck!!

Joy! I am RIDICULOUSLY excited to hear if Overlord will become a published work! Cindy was the one to introduce me to this story. I have been lurking for at least half a year. I believe my greatest admiration of this story is that the pace at which things were revealed was well-done, and the characters were consistent, and comedic in a natural way, not in a way which made fun of any of them. It is very typical to stereotype at least one character in a story, and though some of your characters fit a "mold," so to speak (princess who befriends animals, farmboy hero, et cetera), they all have dimensionality.

Also, Cindy is looking over my shoulder and requests that you email her the story because she, "Loves editing. Loves it so much. Because Editors can't be trusted. Only Cindy can."

Can we assume you'll somehow inform people about the progress of your publishing process (via author's notes in the sequel)?

(Also, how long did this story end up being?)

Owh crap yesh I'll buy it! I'll order it if I have to!
I like the indications you guys leave: Ordanis is never going to change. =)
He finally got the armor changed.. and who are thou? Not art? ><
Ending is a wee bit rushed, but the last line was perfect.
Teshi Teshi Teshi
Teshi YAY!
All the best with the publishing! You guys really deserve it.