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| sincerely disregard 2007-02-14 ch 1,  | abuseTouching and sentimental. I really like the way you ordered everything, wouldn't have had the same impact if you started at the beginning of Izzie's funneral and went on from there. The only thing I would even consider changing is the lenght of your paragraphs. Believe me I have been fussed at for the same crime too but I have come to agree, long paragraphs make a piece hard to read. If you consider breaking them up a bit. Overall I like it. |