This is very cute -- I really like the flow to the way that the story goes. Very nicely done!

ohman, katie

i've GOT to stop reading these
i feel like such a voyeur
looking in on your romance

well, actually, at some point
i'll wind up with a bf
and you'll have to read all my
love poems and stuff

so it'll end up even in the end. ♥ :D

anyways, this was really really good.
specially the locker part:: so cute.

yay.

[ love ]
becca

The way you write, it sounds as if the character is thinking back on something that had happened earlier in her life. Is that right, cause you sure did great! I liked how you wrote the gentleness of him, and how you made it so clear that she loved how he was so careful. Your description of feelings in this story was wonderful! Please write more!
The Reverse Edge Blade

That was sweet! I love fluff! Great job!

~HS

Excellent. Very well done. I LOVED this story. I think it's absolutely perfect. It's a very lovely tale to read when you're feeling bored. This is brilliant.

To grade this story, I'd give it an "A++." That's the highest grade I've ever given any story.

Good job, I really liked this! Not too overwhelmingly sappy, but cute enough to make me smile (especially on a day like today

I love this so much. The comparison is perfect, and your sentences all flow and weld into each other perfectly. Good job!

Loved it.
Usually not a fan of love stories.
But, I can't really say much, considering I'm writing one myself in a way.
Anyway, I liked the way you described it.
Transitions were good, and it was very well written.
Loved the imagery, you painted a wonderful picture that could make any girl's stomach turn.
Also, the fact that it could happen to most anyone makes it easy to relate.