i love this. you are really good at setting up a scene and expressing feelings.

i really like "but he calls me beautiful/and i loose control"

Lovely.

Lovely, lovely, lovely.

The whole thing just sticks to me-every word.

- Noelle

Oh, wow, intense piece. I really like the 3rd & 4th lines of this, especially the bit about the lighter. That's nice. I really love the part "to let his hands shiver on my skin." Such a unique way of putting it. The last part is simple, but works well to show your personality. I don't know that I necessarily like the title, though, because it seems a bit bland for the poem. Nice job, though. Keep writing! :)

bottom lip bit to bleeding and his fingertips leave addictive traces of flame- yes. yes. yes.

Exotic and powerfull, good work.

Maggot.

woah, intense. I like.