Hello! You acutally know me, even if you don't think you do. I'd tell you my name, but I fear I can't say it properly. Hint: think herbs.

Yeah, feel free to check me out sometime.

So anyway: this chapter. It does explain everything pretty well, and I think the constand comparisions of complections to crayons are...amusing. Although I'm wondering how you can condense faith. And, well...Ellis just doesn't seem in the least bit impressed by what he's saying. I mean, I know that he's used to this sort of thing, but it's still pretty darn impressive. You'd think he'd have some sort of reaction.

For an info dump that was great. I mean there was enough meat there that I could actually be totally intralled. Love it.

So far it seems pretty interesting. I wudda read more but I just don't feel like it (no offense). It kinda sounds like Left Behind or so,ething. Keep it up and i'll chekk the rest out later. ur on ma favorites. Pay it Forward.

Somehow I doubt that most faith-based people are able to phase themselves out. Do say if I'm wrong, it's just a hunch. -

That was a bit hard to follow, of coure it might just hav ebeen me, but still.

It's all so...so...cold! It's all very precise and kind of unfeeling.

I don't quite understand the attraction of names that go Z-, but w/e.

Hmm...It's a good story, but I must say I'm having trouble getting in to it. You know?

Interesting! A robot with bags of faith! You've got something here! -

Once again, rifle not riffle.

I'll say one thing for Amia, she seems rather...superficially occupied. -

'This is Ellis Ion Veer a man with jet black hair, which is pulled back into a ponytail.'

This would sound better if it was maybe:

'This is Ellis Ion Veer, a man with jet black hair pulled back into a ponytail.'

It doesn't make a difference either way, it just sounds...funny the other way. -

I like the whole idea that faith can do anything! It's not something I've heard before! That's for certain!

'“Scion glad to see you wake I would ha’ve d for company not to be able to get the full testing potential out ou’r new prototype .”'

What's with the ha've and the ou'r? How would you say that?

(By the way I'm just kind of nit-picking)

'“I see… Ms. Amia Dent, do I remember correct?”'

It would be correctly. Unless he's a bit new at the whole 'English language' thing.

Interesting... It's kind of confusing when you keep saying Elite. Do you mean him? Or is it something else around him? I don't quite understand. It might be made clear in the following chapters so I'll just go see shall I?

Interesting. You did a good job laying down the historical groundwork so when the story starts we won't be floundering in confusion! -

Ys, well I had a long review with more consdtructive criticism but I accidentally deleted it. Oops. But yeah, this is getting less interesting but that's probably just because nothing's happening.

Short, and it's kind of a cliffhanger at the end. I'm so liking this. That must have been an angel, right?

At first I thought that this would be crap but the first few lines urged me on, then halfway through I thought this would be some crappy second coming of Christ story, but I kept reading. And regardless of if it's a crappy second coming of Christ fic, it's pretty good and pretty interesting. I just had to keep reding to see where you were going with it. So I'll definitely be reading at least another chapter or two. I noticed a few mistakes like their instead there. But mostly no big errors.