It's beautiful.

That was beautifully written. The imagery was very good too. Great job!

-Sapphire

Amazing, I've honestly never read anything that so well describes being completely in love with someone.

I get this picture of my head of two people intertwined, but with veins and a bloody tissue. I love the last line, like you want to surgically remove this lover from you life.

I think the tone's a little dark for the subject. I mean, describing love as a violent act CAN be very effective, but the effectiveness depends on the fact that the emotion does not take a backseat to the violence. Because if the violence is driving the poem, then it seems not about love at all, and the purpose of the poem becomes unclear.

interesting... the begining was so sweet in an odd way, but the part then the tone changed... powerful and beautifully described... awesome metaphor

Quite well written. The ending was humorous to me. Good work.

very nicely done. i loved the tone and feel throught this piece. great descriptions and vivid imagery and it kept me interested to continue reading on (which is rare for me) lol ;) great job! magnus

In other words, "Somebody's whipped!"

Just kidding. It's very good, great imagery.