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| Asher Rodriguez 2007-02-14 ch 1,  | abuseThis was kind of confusing... If the wife's water broke and she's about to give birth how would she have time to e-mail him? And if it's a baby how is it saying "papa, papa!"?.. This wasn't a bad idea but yeah, just a bit confusing. -Asher |