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Reviews For: Mind Games

Gogoh 2007-11-19 ch 3,	abuseWow! That syllable sizes are big! Well, I'm not here to ** about that. I began to read it when I realized that it was about sexual abuse and all that...(kinda psycho I am for having interest in the dark side)...and maybe it's a bit an usual type of story, I guess usual is good 'cause I didn't suck up my time reading it! Nice work!
felicia13 2007-09-29 ch 3,	abuseReally? You write all your stuff at school? Do you know how amusing you find that? The chapter was ok, but... I'm not sure where you're trying to go with it. It's all like, "I'm a chapter, but I'm not going to tell you what I'm about," and then it hides. Maybe you should make it not hide. Felicia. p.s. Watch your commas.
WyrdWolf 2007-09-21 ch 3,	abuseWow, that's gotta be confusing as all hell, trying to fend off yourself. And while you're asleep, no less. You worked this idea pretty well, Bob--I wanna see how it turns out. Oh, do you go to West Seneca West? You said you're on the golf team, right? We play that school in a match eventually, and since I didn't see you when we played East, I'm guessing you go to West. see you there!
Twilight Starr 2007-09-14 ch 3,	abuseGood chapter. Very interesting plot. Looking forward to more when you get around to it. ;) ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2007-09-14 ch 2,	abuseInteresting, good chapter. ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2007-09-14 ch 1,	abuseGreat beginning. This story has potential. Good luck with writing and this story. ;) ~Twilight Starr~
The Jynx of Kari 2007-04-30 ch 2,	abusewow. freaky. tho one of my friend's story has to do with a girl who sleepwalks and her dreams affect her real life. But this one takes a different twist on it. freaky. love it, __Kari
felicia13 2007-04-05 ch 2,	abuseComas aren't nice. This is starting to sound oddly familiar to something I once wrote one lonely November last year ... um, yeah. In any case, it's got the same sort of thinking, with the mind games and comas ... felt I should throw that one out there ... perhaps again. Did I mention it when I reviewed the first chapter? Wow. That's hardcore. I don't think that things like this can actually happen. Sure, people have hallucinations due to mental illness of some sort, but what happens to them physically during those hallucinations shouldn't show up on their bodies ... This is a much better thriller than I could have hoped for ... sorry, but I find pyschology fascinating despite what people have told me (it's pointless and just makes you jaded to life). This story delves into that sort of thing. Only more on the action side than the person(ality) side of it. Yeah. Go more into whatever problem he has. It's a big part of the story, obviously. Nicely written. Felicia.
Erin 2007-03-30 ch 2, anon.	abusewoah! this is very interesting! what happens next?
WyrdWolf 2007-03-30 ch 2,	abuseOh-ho, very nice. Freddy Krueger feel. This is awesome; I definitely want to see more of this. It's a great story, creepy, especially the "Help me." line. Great. Wolfie
gram 2007-02-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseNot to bad...except for the "f" word, the story would be alot better with out the bad language. PLEASE, clean it up! Love Ya
WyrdWolf 2007-02-16 ch 1,	abuseMm, I rather like this one, Bob. Good story, pretty fun to follow and to read, and your summary for it was pretty enticing, too. I'll be keeping an eye on this one! Wolfie
felicia13 2007-02-16 ch 1,	abuseWill you be continuing this? Honestly. Because this is just about the best thing I've ever read from you. No lie. There's a faint emotional buzz against the back of this story. The poem in the beginning seems rather random because ... well, it doesn't relate the story at all. It's all just a moment in the life of schizophrenia. I have a deep fascination with mental disorders, so ... perhaps I'm biased with this, but I think it's pretty good. Was the poem just meant to show his paranoia? Or ... well, I actually have no clue. What does it mean? Except for that, it's great. Add more to it, please? Felicia.

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