Curious. ::)) I want to know more... ::)).

OMG! I loved the beginning. You had my interest by paragraph two.

And the end of paragraph nine made me wonder about Endocrymon's past.

Aw...I want to know more about Emmeline.

Okay, so now we know that Endocrymon had a wife and he is now dealing with having lost her. It feels like I want to give him a hug.

Wow, the part where a female gremlin pulled the child away from him...I can't even imagine being in that kind of situation.

Aw...he has a daughter. I honestly did not see that coming. Really cute.

Amazing detail of the Gremlin's world. I really can't wait to see what happens when Endocrymon meets his daughter. This is an amazingly wonderful first chapter. You have a talent.

Danielle Thamasa

It is good to read someone, who has descent grammar for a change! Anyway, I can't really see anything bad to say about this piece. It was a bit on the weird side, and I like that. Isn't that what fantasy is all about. I can see that you intend to make this a chaptered story, and I was surprised at that. It sounds like a one shot by the summary.