i first thought that the second line said, "I want to undergo suffocation," and i smiled and got really siked because this poem could have been really, really cool and maybe not so cheesy if you would have changed around the words and made it not so uhm..observant, maybe?
but how it is, it is still very lovely and i can not complain at all.

I think this may be one of my favorites...your right...they're all phonies

i hear this in my mind to a heavy drum and slow progressive bass. i can actually see this on a double platnim cd. very impressive. (/wrist)

Ahh I can relate to this in a way. Great poem.

There's far too much telling here, and not enough showing. That's suitable for a diary entry or an essay, but this is poetry. Get some imagery in there. Have some fun with the language. Show me something true.

Totally depressing but very well written

this reminds me of the papa roach song in a way...cant think of the title right now! I really like how this is set up and the diction is pretty! great job!

I love the emotions i feel like that sowmtimes except dont you think its alittle depressing?

This is very nice. You have a nice writting talent.

Pretty much how I feel right now. I like the "emo" twist in your poetry recently. Something I can really relate to. It is kinda scary though, reading this... thinking on the past when we first started talking. Hopefully everything is alright with you...

~Black and White Dreams~