woah i like how i get a skin-crawling feeling from reading this...so. character got possessed ehh?

aww i like this!! i love track so i can relate! Good job in tying in everything, the transitions are wonderful!

wow. really good. it could use a little more though. i write short things, so i shoudnt be talking...

wow...kinda funny...i was reading, and felt i was there. its too short tho. kudos to you, to be able to suck me in in only 3 paragraphs. you should write a whole story. i really like you style, tho. truly amazing. there are those who write, those who write well, and those born with a pen in one hand, and a note pad in the other. keep up the good work!

Whoa... that was kind of... creepy... You had good imagery here, even without a lot of discription. Really good job.

~Black and White Dreams~