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Tytherpol
2007-07-19
ch 1,
abuseso much temperature without the coldness taken out yet in here/on here.
it's a really cool piece to read.
no.peace.los.angeles
2007-02-21
ch 1,
abuseThis is a nice piece. It's serious and heartfelt, which is a nice change. I like the specifics of this, like "an electric purple beam." I can really see that. The way you've phrased some of these things makes you wonder if you're referring to people at all - "maybe you think I exist only to displace water in a bathtub" sticks out to me. Very interesting piece. Keep writing! :)
McKenzie Drestire
2007-02-18
ch 1,
abuseLike this, not really sure of what's going on but i like the language and the pace. The line 'even a cloud can block a sunbeam' is a real mood setter, think the line about the straw is a bit random and takes the poem out of it's flow a bit, but toher than that good work.

peaceout, kenzie
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