nice intro. very eye-catching...if words can be eye-catching.

Hm. I'd have to say Luke will wait for years and "He" will show up completely trashed and ready to be embraced. That'd be a nice sequel/follow-up.

Good, I like.

The beginning of this is very catchy. It describes the narrator's feelings very well.

The whole piece leaves a lot to interpretation. It seems like the two live together but the narrator has just realized his feelings for Luke or he is going through some inner conflicts with/about Luke that he needs to sort out by himself.

Either way, this piece was well-crafted and (I still can't understand how you do this so well) subtle.

Very good and creepy! Loved it