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| 123454321 2008-03-09 ch 1,  | abuseThis read almost as a chant in my mind. Very rhythmatic and transe inducing. Very nice. I agree with Eric that it is repetitive and I usually frown on that, but in this piece it works well. -J.A. Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile). |
| angel953 2008-02-26 ch 1, | abuseMe maybe?? lol This is really cool. The flow works well with the topic..nice ~angel953 p.s. hahaha sr. dianne lolz |
| Basara 2007-04-10 ch 1, | abusea heart thumping work... nice! |
| tsarevich alexei 2007-03-27 ch 1, | abusethe short lines slip easily into the next, making the rythem more or less the same as the adrenaline rush you write about. The poem's flow matches the content and that is a powerful tool to use as a writer. Love the repetition also, holds it all together perfectly. Once again, good job! |
| My Deepest Regret 2007-03-02 ch 1, | abusetime to play... |
| the unreal 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseit reminds me of playing chicken. just driving straight towards a cliff, and whoever stops first loses. ohh the russian roulette thing from school! |
| Travis C. Eckert 2007-02-18 ch 1, | abuseGood job, and a lot of repeating for this piece. And even if you don't know what Russian Roulette is you can pretty much get the point. |
| Shookie Smiles Sweetly 2007-02-18 ch 1, | abuseA guy down the street from me actually died a few months ago from Russian Roulette. Crazy... Another friend of mine played often before he sobered up and he's deaf in his left ear from the bullet jamming in the barrell (thank God it did). Crazy... --Shookie Smiles Sweetly |