i really like this. it's so eery and sad. i love the lines 'Shards of glass bite tiny feet
But the blood seeps into the dirt, unnoticed'
its really nice.
are u going to put some more stuff up?

I think if you're going to pop that one comma in, you should just punctuate the whole thing and I think that would be a good idea. Otherwise kill the comma.

It's not bad but I feel that your choice of adjectives is slightly lacking, you use "little" twice and "tiny" once and personally I'd prefer something a little more intersting and atypical.

Otherwise very interesting.

.:midnight:.