WOW.

I find this strangely humorous for some reason...Lol. Brilliant...

It flows well, the rhyming is excellent and never forced or overdone...Amazing job overall. I have to fav. this.

konban wa

Okay, blood stopped flowing, LoL. Anyway, this was also funny -- in that sardonic, cruel-ish sort of way, you know? Yes, and now you're *really* wondering if I have brain damage or something ... I don't (I think).

Anyway, I really liked this poem. Can't wait for you to post more. You've got an interesting creativity. *grin*

Adios
Paalam
-Shan-

konban wa

I just read the third chapter, the one where you feared for your mental health. Personally, I agree with that whole 'fearing for your mental health' thing. Then again, when I read it, I started laughing -- so I'm fearing for my mental stability, too, right now.

Don't worry, I didn't think concept was actually *funny*. I just liked the pun: "Or *sawed* I should say."

Okay, I was going to write a bit more here; but (a) I'll be writing a review for chapter four, too. And (b) I judt got a bloody nose, so I kind of need to go now (and you *really* didn't need to know that, nor, I'm sure, do you care in the least, LoL).

Zaijen
-Shan-

Those are evil and cold words. You really got down well how the person who killed the mother feels with the coldness.
The shortness of the poem was nice here too, even if it was really short. The reason why I liked it like that, was because of the feeling I got after reading such a short text with that ending; the shortness in this poem opened for that, which I liked! Keep it up! You're a great writer!
The Reverse Edge Blade

Valentine...I've never recieved card or anything, so it's not easy for me to relate or understand the cheefulness of it.
Still, I liked this poem! It flowed well with the ending line in each of the verses, and it had a catchy title! Great job!
The Reverse Edge Blade

Those are depressive and bitter words. I liked the rhyming in it, it flowed well! The shortness of the poem was good, any longer, it could've become drabbleish, great job!
Keep at it and write more!
The Reverse Edge Blade