I liked these chapters much more! Even though you introduced a ton more characters, you did so in a way that let me figure it out slowly.

Write on!



PS: Just so you know, "Artemis" is the name of the greek goddess of the hunt. It's a girl's name.

I liked it, but I am kinda confused at this point (hopefully I won't be after I read on). What happened to her father?

Write on!

This seriously made me laugh. I think all fantasy writers that have dragons in their story should read Rule 1, at the very least! Good thoughts, and I hope to see more rules to follow these two! :)

-E.M.

Loved the story. Just a few spelled/grammar mistakes like:

" I rapped it all up" in chapter five. And just wondering, is chapter 9 supposed to be called 'chapter 9'?

Your story is very good, but I think everything happens kind of abruptly. Like, whenever there is any action, it's just like BAM action. Then its over. But I do like how you change POV's.

This is such a great story. I love the cleverness of the plot and the well-portrayed characters. Excellent job, and I can't wait for more!

carm

Ooh! Who-or what- is the rat? Why is it there? Could it be one of theose kids?

Great!

I like the main character already! I only wish I knew her name. Then again, I guess that's why there's another chapter._

Heh heh...low lifes. I like it already, and I did was read the general rules.

Good job! I'm going to read the next chapter!

yay! a new chapter! :D

Great chapter :] I loved the "rock, parchment, knife" line anyways, keep it up! :D

Interesting chapter. Can't wait to see what happens :D

great chapter :] can't wait to see what happens. Keep it up!

OK, first off, I am so sorry it took me so long to review. I won't bore you with excuses. Anyway, though, I have been reading your story and I'm really excited to see what happens and what is happening - why are the kids where they are, why are they looking for dragons, etc. I think you've got something good going here, so I'll be watching for more!

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CL

*gasp* This is so cool! I like how you write the POV, its quite commical. Keep writing! :)