I have to admit that the paragraph about the surfer dude lost me halfway down (I think you tried to say too much in one sentence!), but everything else about this chapter is a showcase of your wit and talent.

Love all the little snarky asides by the narrator. She rockz!

*makes remarks about smooth flow of prose and various other pompous statements that show she appreciates the technique*

I think this is my favourite of all thestories you've ever shown me...

Ooh, I really like this story! It has a nice plot, and your spelling and grammar's excellent. I really have nothing to complain about. Udate soon!
Happy Writing!
~HawkDancer