 bitterosemary 2007-03-26 . chapter 1I like this - it's deliciously jumbled, perfectly suitable for its subject. You tied it up well, too, achieving that quietly desperate sort of ending. I especially marveled at this section:
'In the silence no one minds
If I should cry a minute or two
It solves nothing, it serves nothing.'
I believe the emphasis really fell on that. Lovely work. :) |