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| Ronnie 2007-03-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseReally good imagery, again. This reminds me of a daydream I would have. |
| Judgement(Mathew 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI laughed. |
| Osunale 2007-02-20 ch 1, | abuseThis is a surprising one...the title is immediately eye-catching, yet I wasn't really expecting the poem to be so delightful. There are some wonderful phrases - "That there is a shotgun/Between it’s legs" for example, and the poem comes together in a way that makes one laugh and think at the same time. The only line that seems a bit off is the first. It juts out of the pacing of the rest of the piece too much. Very nice work. |
| Exiled-Knight 2007-02-20 ch 1, | abuseSo dream about that lobster often? Well that lobster was very deep. The poem was very serious and good and symbolic and then the lobster just pops up! :D |