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Stuggling Writer 2007-08-22 ch 20,	hmm. I can't decide if I acctually like it or not... I must say that it is...well thought out, but I just can't seem to form an opinion about it. Sorry. Keep writing, though (not that one review could stop you, I hope). I must say that I love her name, where did you get it? Is it made up? Also how do you say it? lol- I am so stupid sometimes. Anyway, happy writing! Hope the creative juices continue to flow- God knows we all hate to get writer's block. :) -Fellow stuggling writer
xoxo1 2007-06-14 ch 18,	ahh, i hope dey dont get hurt update soonn
xoxo1 2007-06-03 ch 16,	-thinks for a moment- wutz a shapire agen? i have bad memory and omg, wut she saw, iz dat wutz goin to happen? updatee
Heart of the RubyFire 2007-05-31 ch 15,	Cool, another nice chapter :) I thought the history of Alaizabella's mom and dad was pretty interesting and I also thought it was funny how Nitara got Malik's attention so fast versus how long it took Lucifer to get his attention. I look forward to your next chapter. ~Heart of the RubyFire
xoxo1 2007-04-29 ch 15,	Alaizabella is a unique and beautiful name and love your story who was the shapire at the dance?? update soon plz
Heart of the RubyFire 2007-04-15 ch 14,	Yikes! Are her dreams true?! I hope not. This whole story is coming along nicely- I wonder who the Shapire was at the school dance- Cal? Brian? The teacher who sent her out? And will she meet up with them again? I have too many questions to ask on here, so I'll just have to keep reading and hopefully get some of them answered:) What will happen next? Please don't keep me in suspense too much longer!! ~Heart of the RubyFire P.S.- I think Alaizabella is a really cool name:)
amanda288 2007-03-21 ch 1,	Awesome story! Keep on writing
odman01 2007-03-04 ch 10,	Doesn't seem possible to bring anyone back from her former life at this point, but anything could happen. Oddities: 1)Lucifer throws out words like "Privates" and "Ancestors" and Alaizabella doesn't question anything. They need to be introduced as soon as possible if Lucifer won't be giving an explanation before they meet. 2)There's a line break in the middle of the chapter that seems unnecessary.
odman01 2007-03-03 ch 9,	A refreshing perspective on the other main character (at least he seems that way). A few spelling errors, like mediatation should be meditation, I think. Also towards the end, there are a few paragraphs that are italicized that I don't think should be that way. Or if that was intended, it's not clear why. Looking forward to the next chapter.
odman01 2007-02-27 ch 1,	The problem with most stories based on vampires is that the writer uses too many cliches. Everything has already been done, but try to create something refreshing, even though it is not necessarily new.
Nickolaus Pacione 2007-02-27 ch 6,	Overall this is one hell of a horror story, though the vampire genre is done more than enough and destroyed more than enough times. This stands out because of the originality behind it. You should go and send this off for publication to a couple of places.
angeleyez61888 2007-02-24 ch 6,	Very intersting story, I can't wait to read more of it.
odman01 2007-02-23 ch 5,	Pretty confusing. So the main character has two personalities?
basketballgirl89 2007-02-22 ch 1,	It was a really good start...i like this story so far it has potential. the only thing i didn't like was the fact that she was crying over a guy like that. why get all upset a guy dumped you because he didn't like a kiss. I mean come on theyve been together since like the what fifth grade and he finaly kisses her in the eighth yeah that's believable! I bet he kissed her and he realized he was gay, so he dumped her since he didn't get turned on or something. Okay i'm going to stop rambling now.
odman01 2007-02-22 ch 3,	Cal is stupid. Chocolate is good for the heart. Very nice of the teacher guy to let kids out into the street at night. Some phrases seem out of place, such as "he favors you" or "I croaked". At the end, Ala can't scream but she can apparently "croak" lol. Interested to see where this goes.

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