This is awesome. Cheesy, but awesome. Can't wait for the next chapter.

I believe you and I will work perfectly together...you share my type of writing style instead you decribe terms to express feelings while I describe surroundings in complete details...you too do that but I highly doubt as much I have in my life (all my teacher tried to tell me that is vital I shorten my writing, even though I am what they consider a creative writer...just like you = )

Augh, how was it that I missed this chapter. So many elements to the story. I love it. But everyone falling in love with her? O.o Weird. Haha. Nice going.

::Kari

Aw, it's all cool. No worries, lol. Go and work on your AP classes. Ha, junior year IS the most stressful. It's what year I'm in now. >

Ooh This is good, and I know I've only read the first chapter; I promise to read the rest 2morro, but i'm tired.
I like the way you did the short, blunt sentences in the beginning.
It looks like one of the most interesting things i've found up here.

A bit adult for my tastes, but very well writtin. This story keeps getting beter and better. my one complaint, is that Chita seemed a little out of charicder, but you're the author so you would know him better then I would.

Always craveing reviews
Beefbag.

odd writeing? This is by far the beast yet! keep it up!

"YAY! WE get to learn more about CHita!" **screams into empty living room**
lol, J/K. My gosh, I praise the dudes who created the Story alerts and author alerts, man. Otherwise . . . Well, let's just say my memory sucks. lol.
I really love this story, it's so characterized and. . . I think I'v said all this befoer. lol. Well, I'll be waiting for the next installment.
__Kari

K. on to chapter one. slow start, but who cares? I'm accualy likeing this background stuff,. you know how to make it interesting.

Hey, i just now finished reading the prelude and i gotta say: great premace! just spectacular. The ordanary person becomes involved with something fanticy related is a hard one to pull off, but I've gotta say- looks like you can do it. Bravo!

I happen to have some stuff up too, nowhere near as good, but i'd apprechiate an honest-even harsh-review if ya get time.

Despite the long pauses and the long wait, I truly do think that genius should take it's time and that's how it is. I myself write my chapters really long so maybe that's why they seem rushed and confusing...lol. Not the point here! The point is that this chapter is consistant after not really being able to work on it and I applaude you Daisy...I'm so glad I got this on alert, otherwise I wouldn't have found the new chapter in time...whatever that means...lol, i'm just wasting time.__Kari
[in case you didn't notice, I went from simplekari to simpleKari45 to Kari's revenge...long story and boring with or w/o details...lol] KUDOS!

So far it's REALLY good. Simple Kari told me about it and it is REALLY well written. I normally don't like full stories, (I normally go for poetry) but this sparked my attention. I actually like the backround stuff. Later. Keep writing!

it's interestingly pulling me in. i want to hear more about it. keep writing on it.