Hi there! I've been away for awhile, and forgot to check up on these! They're lovely as always, my particular favorite was the daffodil as a wine glass. You hit on several perfect images. Others have more filler than necessary, and some of the haiku seem to lose momentum with the middle line--there isn't always enough impetus to make the third line seem like it's up to par with the rest of the poem. For the most part, though, these are just as great as I remembered!

Yay, you posted another one! True to my word, I shall now submit another review.

I liked the most recent addition, although I was not entirely sure how relevant the last line was. The child doesn't seem to link with the first two lines. The only explanation I can find is that you are trying to communicate the precious nature of youth, with words such as "silver" and "golden-leaved". There I go, reading too much into something yet again. Having said all this, perhaps this is the common nature of Haikus, in order to give it a sense of finality; otherwise we would be left hanging somewhat.

Some of the other verses that I liked were "ash wednesday", especially the second line, which expertly conveyed the endless cycle of life and death in very few words; as I have already mentioned, "water and moonlight", a surreal and calming verse; and "an offering to the stars" which had a quirky feel and definitive character.

There you go, and I hope you will find time to write some more.

Thank you very much,

Eos Erigeneia x

Wow, this one's beautiful! Golden-leaved white birches--very pretty, romantic, fanciful. I would suggest, "A child sits nearby" . The "t" sound and the shortness of the word "it" sort of bring the poem to a sharp, loud halt, which isn't in fitting with the rest of the poem.

Beautiful addition, I'm glad you updated!

Wonderful imagery. I especially like the water and moonlight one; it touched something in me. I hope you continue with these as you seem to have a talent for it. I apologise for not submitting a fuller review, I have a lot to do. Perhaps if you write some more I shall review again!

I really like this chapter 9 one.

I loved the newest one! I think, though, that I like it better without the three adjectives tacked on to the end. I don't feel like they add much--the first two lines are amazing, and they suggest the softness, strangeness, and secrecy to me so well that the third is superfluous. That wouldn't make it a haiku, of course, but... just my thoughts. :-)

I know what you mean about reading reviews through your fingers! I always hope it's something nice! I did get your response; I've been home from college for spring break, so I haven't had internet or I would've replied sooner. :-) Thank you for the review of On the Shore!

And of course, keep writing!

The cricket one is STUNNING. A lone, wild fiddle. . .

Your haiku are awe-inspiring. :-) I really shouldn't be the only one reviewing, because these are just too good!

Gorgeous! This one's right up there with the first one. Patchwork quilt--what an amazing description of the sky. I saw it so perfectly in my head and sort of nodded along... like "yeah, it IS like a patchwork quilt!"

I think it's about time I stick this on my favorites' list...

Also, thanks for the review!

What a cool idea! I think the first haiku is the strongest; there don't seem to be any wasted words, and it's just image after beautiful image. The others are nice, too, but they just don't seem up to par with that first one. I'll look forward to more as you update this!