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| Twilight Starr 2007-10-13 ch 1,  | abuseLasting advice in your last line. Great poem. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| -insertsomethinguniquehere- 2007-03-10 ch 1, | abuse"they're they girls who drink"- i think you mean "they're the girls..." "someone elses" should be "someone else's" But I like the message. And everybody knows people that that.[the "beauty queens".] :) |
| notthecreepyfatguy 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseThis poem really describes a few friends of mine (the fashion models). I loved it, and I'll remember its message when I'm hangin' with my buds. |
| CitizenOfZozo 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abusePowerful message. I think it's something a lot of people need to hear. I agree with the previous reviewer, I really liked the lines they pointed out as well. Nicely written. |
| hey maria 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI like the sort of haphazard rhythm running through this: "microscopes, stethoscopes, or horoscopes," "they're they girls who drink themselves to sleep in someone elses bed/or injecting some new club drug into their very own heads," "they're the girls who dress like fashion models and think they're beauty queens./but people are just people,/and they're only seventeen." It's sort of a subject that's been discussed a lot before, but you've wrote about it in a more unique way. Nice job. |