Lasting advice in your last line.

Great poem.

~Twilight Starr~

"they're they girls who drink"- i think you mean "they're the girls..."
"someone elses" should be "someone else's"
But I like the message. And everybody knows people that that.[the "beauty queens".]
:)

This poem really describes a few friends of mine (the fashion models). I loved it, and I'll remember its message when I'm hangin' with my buds.

Powerful message. I think it's something a lot of people need to hear. I agree with the previous reviewer, I really liked the lines they pointed out as well. Nicely written.

I like the sort of haphazard rhythm running through this: "microscopes, stethoscopes, or horoscopes," "they're they girls who drink themselves to sleep in someone elses bed/or injecting some new club drug into their very own heads," "they're the girls who dress like fashion models and think they're beauty queens./but people are just people,/and they're only seventeen." It's sort of a subject that's been discussed a lot before, but you've wrote about it in a more unique way. Nice job.