Holy... Wow.

That's all I can think of saying. Wow.

When you're describing the frog, you used the word "too" when you should have used the word "two".

Aside from that, I liked it.

I give this story a 9/10.

It would have easily been a 10, but in the scene where Toshi picks up the symbiote glove, you used the word "expecting" when you should have used the word "inspecting".

Nothing major, but it's still there.

I'll review the next chapter once I read it.

Wow...where to start? Well, to start, I am shocked to see that you don't have more reviews - this is a story worth publishing. I have read hundreds of books, and a lot of them don't meet up to your standards.

This story was very creative, and although the symbiote idea has been used before, you used it in a completely unique way. I loved your characters - they each have lovable personalities, and I can't decide which is my favorite. If I try to pick one, then I feel guilty for not picking the other, lol! Hey, even the bad guys are intriguing! Which is really inspiring, cause I tend to take shortcuts with my characters, only focusing on developing the main person. Now after reading this, I'm going to want to take time to make my bad guys even more developed and evil-seeming.

Although, I'm not sure how, but you managed to make the Da-Ku seem all-powerful and invincible, yet somehow human at the same time. You've got talent, I'll say that much.

Anyway, before this review gets too long, I just want to say that I really enjoyed your story. I usually don't leave long reviews, but I felt compelled to let you know what I think. Also, is this story completed, or are there more chapters on the way?

oh a twilight zone moment!

Excellent so far, I will continue reading, and says a lot.

Wat an imagination!^^
I lik it, though I was more freak out by the glove than Toshi *shudder*
I read ur profile that you read your reviewer's work and I would hav to say that I hav no idea why I posted mine so early so plz don't read it!
Ever thought about getting this to publish? I hav a pretty good imagination so I can imagine a best seller for it and the video games, collectibles...
I wish I could express my imagination better lik u
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