I liked this! I think it would have had a more poetic flow if you put it in stanzas (and put in space holders, like x-X-x, in the spaces between the stanzas so that FP wouldn't take them out when you uploaded it). But I liked the feeling of the poem, it would make a great monologue, there's just so much emotion and imagery in there. But I think that if you got the lines to be more even in length and maybe used an online rhyme dictionary to help you with one of the more simple rhyme scheme (I know its hard, but I think that this poem and you both have some potential!), it would be a truly AWESOME poem! GREAT JOB!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon

Well, for one thing you are right. The symbolism is right on the money. Great poem. The only thing that was a little weird was the end, it just didn't seem to flow right for me.

Short and ... bitter cold, just the way I like it. So this poem is five years old, I can still review! Anyway, it's pretty cool. Nice word choice and all that.Cheers, and good work.

I love the ocean! It's soo pretty. I liked the descriptions in this poem. Very nice!

AWWW!!!! This one is so cute!!!! You're a great poet!!!