It's like Jumunji meets Dungeons and Dragons! Cool idea.

Hey, good story xilmin............wow one that doesn't really scare me!!!!!!!Keep up the good work!!

very good star and a interesting ending aswell
good story.

It was good although I wish it could have been a little longer...with more details. But it was interesting..great job

*grins* I liked it.. I wish it had been a bit longer... maybe with more details? but I did like it! (aren't you proud of me.. I reviewed!)

that was really good, for all that it was short

I liked it. 'specially the plot.